Flicking back and forth between character perspectives only makes sense if there’s something between the parts to distinguish them…at one point you switched from her to him and I had to read it twice to understand that you’d gone back to him telling the story…I doesn’t have to be much, just a couple extra line spaces, or a small heading; nothing that would detract from the flow of the story.«1» 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 04:49:02I liked the first 4 chapters…they had potential…but this one killed that off. xxx Flicking back and forth between character perspectives only makes sense if there’s something between the parts to distinguish them…at one point you switched from her to him and I had to read it twice to understand that you’d gone back to him telling the story…I doesn’t have to be much, just a couple extra line spaces, or a
