4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 20:02:10Nice story despite misspellings. there where some many errors it was hard to follow the story. xxx hd there where some many errors it was hard to follow the story. Wish there was more description in the beatings the assholes got and the after effects and reactions of others at the party, but maybe you’ll give us more in your next attempt.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 12:21:29While I applaud your effort. At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read it your self. Wall of text makes it hard to read.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 16:44:58spell check, smaller paragraphs.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 15:18:31Always re-read your own stories before posting, I suggest reading them out loud to yourself, as this will reveal a large percentage of your mistakes. I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you.
