One suggestion though, split the paragraphs with a line break between them. xxx video hd It makes it easier for the reader to follow a story.«12» It makes it easier for the reader to follow a story.«12» I agree with the line break, especially if your next story is longer, it will make it easier to read.Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-12 04:49:44it was good. I agree with the line break, especially if your next story is longer, it will make it easier to read.Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-12 04:49:44it was good. One suggestion though, split the paragraphs with a line break between them. However, a little more build up to the actual rape would be good. I agree with the line break, especially if your next story is longer, it will make it easier to read.Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-12 04:49:44it was good. 7 comments«12»READERReport 2009-10-14 10:20:44not bad for a first…shorten the paragraghs..easier to read that way,
